TV Pilot Outline

OK, so the show is basically gonna be "Ally McBeal on a Plane" to put it in TV lingo. It's a half-hour dramedy (no laugh track). I'd appreciate some feedback on this, thanks in advance!
The core cast is small, because it's hard to follow a bunch of flight attendants around on their trips, and also because our main character will be a point of view character. We'll have a lot of celebrity guest stars as both flight attendants and passengers, though (think: Britney Spears as a flight attendant!) The core cast consists of:

• Elena aka “Queen of Sky” (lead/POV/narrator) She’s a cross between Carrie Bradshaw and Ally McBeal who speaks just enough Spanish to qualify as a Spanish speaker at Legacy Airlines. I'm picturing someone like Alicia Silverstone.

• Ricky, Latin flamer/party boy—He’s so hilarious he can get away with murder, like joining the Mile High Club with a random passenger while he’s working the flight!

• Ivette, Caribbean diva/party girl—likes to tease nerdy frequent flyers and use them to buy her stuff. Later she becomes a “cockpit queen” (always in the cockpit flirting with the pilots).

Queen of Sky Pilot Episode Breakdown

Teaser: The show begins in the middle of an airplane evacuation. When the camera zooms out, we see it’s actually a simulator in a training facility. Our heroine, Elena, is the last one off and she trips and falls down the slide face first.

Title sequence and theme song.

ACT 1

• Final Exam at flight attendant school—we hear Elena reading the questions aloud in her mind: “What’s the city code for Spokane, Washington?” “How many fire extinguishers are on a 757 and where are they located?”

• The uptight trainer announces everyone passed the final except Tony. (“And for future reference, Tony, PBE does not stand for ‘Pleasurable Balls Encounter’—it’s ‘Protective Breathing Equipment!’”) Tony is escorted off the premises, making a dramatic exit. (“I’ll be back!”) Ricky blows him a kiss.

• Graduation ceremony. The recruits receive their wings, donning their uniforms for the first time, then the trainer announces Base City assignments are posted in the hall.

• Scene of hysteria as most find out they got the dreaded New York base. Elena imagines her boyfriend back in Miami distraught. Elena, Ricky and Ivette decide to catch the first flight to NY to beat the rush.

• Onboard the flight to NY, Elena calls her boyfriend in Miami to tell him the bad news. He acts disappointed, but is actually thrilled. Ricky and Ivette tell her they both dumped their boyfriends when they got invited to flight attendant training and recommend that Elena do the same.

ACT 2

• The flight attendant offers them on ground cocktails—doubles!—(“You’re gonna need these…”) and some advice. Ricky asks her if she knows of any available crash pads in NY. She says she’ll ask Wanda in the back.

• Wanda, a motherly black lady, says there are three spots open in her crash pad, but she can only take them temporarily since they’re new hires. Their conversation is cut short when Wanda has to arm her doors for departure.

• At the crash pad (a two-bedroom apartment with eight bunk beds in Kew Gardens, Queens) Wanda gives the three of them the house rules.

• A grouchy “senior mama” complains about allowing new hires at the crash pad. (“They’re gonna be here all the time!”)

• Elena wakes up to a 4am call from scheduling: “We’ve got your first assignment for you!”

ACT 3

• Elena walks onto plane rubbing her eyes and yawning. The crew asks if she’s the reserve replacing Julie. She responds, “Whatever you say—this is my first trip.”

• She sits on the jumpseat with Bonnie, an outspoken bisexual Asian chick a la Margaret Cho. Bonnie explains that airline passengers check their decency and humanity at the aircraft door. She also tells Elena all about her love life (she has a boyfriend and a girlfriend). Elena is shocked.

• After takeoff, a man goes into the lav next to their jumpseat with a thick newspaper in his hand. Bonnie says, “See what I mean?!”

• Then, during the beverage service, a passenger yells at Elena for not having his drink choice (hot chocolate). Bonnie nods at her as if to say “I told you so.”

• Then, as they’re picking up, a passenger lowers his seatback abruptly, causing the passenger behind him to hit him over the head. Bonnie nods to Elena again, knowingly.

• Montage of three more FULL flights with city codes captions (ex. ORD-MSP). We see Elena and Bonnie pushing the beverage cart up and down the aisle in a seemingly endless loop.

• Last leg, video equipment breaks and they have to do the safety “dance.” As Elena does the demo, she imagines herself on a stage with the spotlight on her and her theme song playing.

• Elena returns to the crash pad late at night to find only one snoring flight attendant with eye mask and ear plugs in place. She can’t get a hold of any of her friends to debrief, so she starts a blog (“The Queen of Sky’s Life of Glamour”) to recount her first crazy day on the job. “I’m already wondering what I’ve gotten myself into…I mean, really, I thought this was supposed to be a glamorous job!” Fade out.

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Any thoughts? Rereading this, I think I need to adjust the Act breaks. I believe the rule is "your characters can only sleep on the commercial break."