First Snippet!

Hello All, I've actually finished the first draft of Act I already! I've submitted it to the production company for review. I told them it flowed so fast, I must have either done something really right or horribly wrong!

In honor of Steven Slater, the JetBlue flight attendant who made a saucy exit the other day--Good for him!--here's a scene from my screenplay of kind of the reverse scenario. A passenger has (almost) had enough! (Of course, all flight attendants know the passenger-abusing-flight attendant scenario is more the norm!)

(FYI, VO = Voice Over. This is the blog narration.)

[scrippet]
INT. AIRPLANE - FIRST CLASS CABIN - NIGHT

ELENA (VO)
Queen of Sky just wasn't on the ball last night. I was working first class on the way to Buenos Aires, and it didn't start off well.

Elena helps a boarding PASSENGER stow her ridiculously oversized SUITCASE in the overhead bin. Elena loses her grip and drops it on a middle-aged frequent flyer in a business suit, Mr. Souffrant (the same man she collided with in the first scene), seated on the aisle.

ELENA
I'm sooo sorry, sir.

MR SOUFFRANT
(politely)
Don't worry about it. I'm fine.

LATER

ELENA (VO)
Then I spilled a drink-OK, two drinks-on another guy. I'm such a klutz! We were still at the gate.
Elena carries a coffee and bloody mary on her small metal tray. She trips and spills them both on Mr. Souffrant.

ELENA
(throwing a stack of cocktail napkins on the spill)
I'm so sorry, sir! Let me get you a cleaning voucher.

MR SOUFFRANT
(still polite, with a feigned smile)
That's OK, don't worry about it. Just get me some seltzer and a towel.

LATER

ELENA (VO)
Thankfully, things went better in flight.

Elena lounges on the first class jumpseat reading a PEOPLE MAGAZINE as Mr. Souffrant repeatedly rings his call bell trying to get rid of his meal tray. Ricky struts up from coach and Mr. Souffrant tries to hand him his tray.

RICKY
(with a dismissive flip of the hand)
I'm sorry, sir. Is not my cabin!

Ricky continues to the front of the plane and joins Elena on the first class jumpseat. They start chatting.

RICKY
These passengers are so high maintenance.

ELENA
Tell me about it! I'm working first class, remember?

RICKY
Oh, hey girl, did you make the crew juice?

ELENA
Not yet. Thanks for reminding me.

Elena gets up and disappears behind the galley curtain where she starts making a toxic-looking concoction of red wine, champagne, different minis from the liquor kit, Sprite, and a splash of orange juice. She mixes it in three empty Evian bottles.

EXT. AIRPORT ARRIVALS AREA - MORNING

ELENA (VO)
Anyway, all that matters is we got to Buenos Aires in one piece.

The NINE-MEMBER CREW climbs onto their hotel van and Elena starts passing around cups of sangria.

ELENA (VO)
(continuing)
And, most importantly, Queen of Sky has a hot date on the layover!

Their van pulls away from the terminal, splashing through a mud puddle, which drenches the much-abused Mr. Souffrant as he stands on the sidewalk waiting for his ride. His facial expression finally changes to full frustration.
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OMG! What a cool app this is! Anyway, let me know what you think. Remember, this is my first draft and I'm a novice screenwriter, so PLS constructive criticism only!

Note to Self: Add a Steven Slater-esque scene later in script.